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the ocean sings
the bluebirds fly
the shells will scream
their silent cry

when divers come
to get the pearl
you raised so long
for a little girl

five years you were working
for the final move
get it ready in time!
For the final approve

the diver
he CRACKS you
he SMACKS you
he HACKS you
and you were just shielding
your little pearl

and while you are sighing
the diver is smiling
and while you are dying
the princess is crying

'cause you had to die
for the princess' delight.

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My first attempt to write an English poem.
I was inspired by *BeauCyphre. He taught me not to think about what you write, just let your mind to it.
Let it flow.
And this is the result.

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Thalana Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
I am a lover of poetry - And my dear; This is Beautiful! Poetry should make you wonder, think, - recognize something you might have hidden deep inside - Or maybe give you all new knowledge about something. And much , much more. It may not give the same experience to all your readers, and it should not.

Poetry is a treasure from the authors spirit - And when shared; it becomes a treasure in the receivers spirit.
Thank you for sharing your treasure :heart:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much. This is my first piece of literature, and it is a great honor to hear your kind words. :love:
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lizzallen Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh I like it! I can never write good poetry and I'm a native English speaker. X3
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:
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lizzallen Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :)
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Chukapix Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Really great :clap: !
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:
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Chukapix Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Np ;)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, your work has been selected to be in #Genuine-ART's Featured Corner.
Have a nice day,

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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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