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the ocean sings
the bluebirds fly
the shells will scream
their silent cry

when divers come
to get the pearl
you raised so long
for a little girl

five years you were working
for the final move
get it ready in time!
For the final approve

the diver
he CRACKS you
he SMACKS you
he HACKS you
and you were just shielding
your little pearl

and while you are sighing
the diver is smiling
and while you are dying
the princess is crying

'cause you had to die
for the princess' delight.

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My first attempt to write an English poem.
I was inspired by *BeauCyphre. He taught me not to think about what you write, just let your mind to it.
Let it flow.
And this is the result.

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:iconthalana:
Thalana Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
I am a lover of poetry - And my dear; This is Beautiful! Poetry should make you wonder, think, - recognize something you might have hidden deep inside - Or maybe give you all new knowledge about something. And much , much more. It may not give the same experience to all your readers, and it should not.

Poetry is a treasure from the authors spirit - And when shared; it becomes a treasure in the receivers spirit.
Thank you for sharing your treasure :heart:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much. This is my first piece of literature, and it is a great honor to hear your kind words. :love:
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lizzallen Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh I like it! I can never write good poetry and I'm a native English speaker. X3
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:
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:iconlizzallen:
lizzallen Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :)
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:iconchukapix:
Chukapix Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Really great :clap: !
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:
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:iconchukapix:
Chukapix Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Np ;)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, your work has been selected to be in #Genuine-ART's Featured Corner.
Have a nice day,

:icongenuine-art:
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :huggle:
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:iconobsessedbysherlock:
ObsessedbySherlock Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Permanently faving this. :iconhurrrrrplz:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:heart:
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:iconfelidae84:
FeliDae84 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
Auf alle Fälle weiter machen, Oli :) Ich finds wunderschön - bis auf den letzten Satz.. der fühlt sich etwas abrupt an :)
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Danke, ich werds versuchen! ;)
Ist nicht so einfach, die richtigen Worte zu finden.
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:iconfelidae84:
FeliDae84 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
Auf alle Fälle :) Und dann auch noch in einer Fremdsprache! Echt: Hut ab!
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Zuviel des Lobes! :blush:
danke,danke,danke!
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:iconfelidae84:
FeliDae84 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
Mit Nichten :) ...habe früher selber ab und an was geschrieben und finds super, wenn man seine Gedanken in einer so schönen Form festhalten kann :)
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Es ist aber wirklich viel schwerer als Fotos machen. :)
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:iconfelidae84:
FeliDae84 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
absolut :) - Wie wärs denn mal mit einem Gedicht zu einem Bild oder anders herum?
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Zu einem Bild? Hmm..
Da fände ich beides schwer - sowohl das Bild zum Gedicht als auch das Gedicht zum Bild. ;)
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little-supernova Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ugh, that's a filthy powerful last stanza.
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks.
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Rainbow-Sword Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Klasse! ich mag vor allem die thematik. ich hab inzwischen schon so viele liebesgedichte gelesen, dass wird auf dauer etwas fade, aber hier hat man mal was anderes. und der interpretationsspielraum ist unendlich :D gut das ist bei fast allen gedichten so, aber ich amüsier mich immer darüber. "Ja, also da kann man das, das und das rein lesen. das hat der autor auf jeden fall so gemeint."
äh meist eher nicht ;)
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Vielen Dank, das ermutigt mich zum Weitermachen!
:)
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Katori-93 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful~~
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:
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:iconkatori-93:
Katori-93 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure^---^
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BeauCyphre Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Haven't I told you it's wonderful? And in less than a day you even got more favorites than all of my poems combined.
Well, you know I'm not in the "favorite"- or "like"-business, but I know when I'm thrilled by a thing, and The sacrifice. is a gem of a poem that feels like a fairytale, and you definitely nailed it. This shell's alive, these tears are burning, and the princess' pearl will last forever - and if not forever, it will last much longer than the little princess.
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I love it when you write comments like these. :heart:
Pictures and literature cannot be compared that well. People like to see a picture, because they can look at it for about 10 seconds, leave a favourite and go on. But when it comes to literature, they say "ah, it's too long, I won't read it." and then they are not as appreciated as pictures.
It is great that I could tell a story to you. I did never know that I could ever tell a story with words.. :blush:
Aaah, I'm talking way too much.
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BeauCyphre Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Danke :)!
Ich hab nicht von Bildern geredet; ich meinte nur dieses eine Gedicht, was die Anzahl der Faves angeht.
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Ich bin ein bisschen abgeschweift (oder abgeschwiffen?).
tut mir Leid..
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:iconbeaucyphre:
BeauCyphre Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Hör ja auf, dich für irgendwas zu entschuldigen! :glomp:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Ich neige dazu, bei Leuten, denen ich vertraue, zu "labern". ^^;
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BeauCyphre Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Du laberst nicht, du erzählst. Das ist was anderes. Und ich mag es, wenn du viel schreibst :).
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Danke.
Es ist viel leichter, zu schreiben, wenn man seinen Gedanken freien Lauf lässt, das hab ich gemerkt, als du mir das gesagt hast. Ich habe da mehr drauf geachtet und sofort ging alles viel einfacher!
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CleverRose Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
that was cool
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks.
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CleverRose Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
yur welcome
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Apsalaar Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
It reminds me about the sacrifice nature gives everyday for the happiness of human beings... Maybe this interpretation isn't deep, but it was my first thought. The second - well, our relationships, love, parenthood, master-pupil relation too... They are all heavy because of the risk of loosing the important person.
This kind of loss - imagine, when mother sees her child going into the wrong direction and she's unable to do anything to protect the child...
Imagine the master's apprentice wasting whole effort of his/her teacher...
very beautiful poem. :hug:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you. :heart:
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CoyoteDove Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap: this is really good
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:icondragonfly-oli:
dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :blush:
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CoyoteDove Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome =)
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IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh dear lord, this is your first attempt?! :omg: This was so beautiful and moving! :worship:
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you.. :blush:
This means a lot to me!
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CherishKay Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, this is good! :aww:

btw, how do you center the text?
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dragonfly-oli Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :aww:

By using
< div align = " center" >

Without the spaces.
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CherishKay Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I thought that was only for journals, I guess not.
Thank you!
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kori-hibana Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Student General Artist
it seems you have found a new talent :)
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